The concentrated animal feeding operation(CAFO) system is currently the dominate production system of livestock in the United States. The CAFO's system views animals and humans as objects that can simply be dispensed. According to the CAFO's system animals were created to be slaughtered. Animals aren't treated with respect, they are cramped into small spaces without enough personal space. The slaughtering process is full of flaws that make the process extremely painful for the animals. Unfortunately the CAFO's system also treats humans as objects that can be dispensed. The CAFO's system exploits their employees in many ways, for example by mistreating and endangering them. Management in the CAFO's system provide drugs for the employee's to alter the speed in which they work, which ends up seriously hurting or getting that employee killed. This is significant because the CAFO's wouldn't think twice about firing an injured employee, yet they put them in harms way.
This is a great piece just needs to have a couple of more details. What caught my attention was your thesis statement its a great way to start off and to catch the readers attention. Although your thesis statement should relate more to your topic sentence. I believe you should define dispensed and say the animals are being disposed... or what ever way you feel it can be used. You can make a argument in your last sentence and relate it to the book Fast Food Nations, when they had a worker who risked his life saving another human life and how his bosses turned from him after he got injured from working.
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